[ncdnhc-discuss] Re: ultimate change in the resolution editing

[Dave Crocker]

At 08:14 AM 12/10/2001 +0100, Dany Vandromme wrote:
>During the MdR meeting, you request some changes in one of the
>resolution, from a discussion with Alejandro.
>As we are preparing the online vote approval, we need your suggested
>changes,

Dany,

The agreed changes were the same as I had previously posted to the list, 
with one item deleted.

here is another copy of of the posted text.  frankly i do not remember 
which part we agreed to delete; presumably the note-taker can clarify this.

d/


>To: "Milton Mueller" <Mueller at syr.edu>
>From: Dave Crocker <dhc2 at dcrocker.net>
>Subject: Re: [ncdnhc-discuss] Revised security resolution
>Cc: <discuss at icann-ncc.org>
>Date: Sat, 03 Nov 2001 07:48:31 -0800
>
>a few, changes, to improve accuracy and precision:
>
>At 01:30 PM 11/2/2001 -0500, Milton Mueller wrote:
>>The Internet's robustness relies largely
>>on its distributed, decentralized nature.
>>ICANN is responsible for central coordination
>>of key resources critical to its operation;
>>namely, domain names, Internet addresses,
>>and protocol parameters.  Ensuring the
>
>         namely, administration of domain names, Internet IP addresses, 
> and protocol parameters, as well as operation of the DNS root servers.
>
><<covers the entire system, since there is no other organization with a 
>focus on the total system.  /d>>
>
>
>>security of the DNS root servers, the IP
>>allocation system, and other central
>
>         security of DNS name allocation administration, DNS server 
> operation, IP address allocation administration
>
>
>>resources within ICANN's deliberately
>>limited purview, is a responsibility shared
>>by all organizations within ICANN.
>>
>>The non-commercial organizations and
>>entities represented in the Non-Commercial
>>Domain-Name Holders Constituency
>>(NCDNHC) of ICANN's DNSO may be less
>>able to recover from disruptions in their
>>operations caused by attacks on the DNS.
>
><<A small Internet-based for-profit business is likely to suffer vastly 
>more than National Geographic magazine, which is non-commercial but very 
>large.  So the above sentence is note quite correct.  It also does not 
>seem to serve an important purpose in the overall statement.  The 
>paragraph, below, is sufficient for highlighting the nature of NCDNHC 
>focus. /d>>
>
>
>>Many non-commercial interests in the DNS
>>and IP allocation system are in universities
>>and research institutes with high levels of
>>technical expertise. Many others, however,
>>have very limited financial and technical
>>resources to train for defense against and
>>prevention of attacks or to recover from a
>>crisis.
>>
>>Because the expertise embodied in non-
>>commercial organizations is usually more
>>accessible to a wider community and not
>
>is usually open and accessible to a wide community and not
>
><<< "more" and "wider" make an unanchored comparison; the purpose of the 
>sentence is served without making a comparison. /d>>
>
>
>>restricted to proprietary interests, academic
>>and other non-commercial organizations may
>>be optimal points for the diffusion of knowledge
>>about threats to the security of the systems
>>under ICANN's administration.
>
>
>         and other non-commercial organization are excellent participants 
> in efforts to diffuse knowledge
>
><<In fact, academic organizations are typically NOT "optimal", or even 
>very good, places for discussion and resolution of operational matters.  /d>>
>
>
>>Therefore the NCDNHC calls upon the Names
>
>Therefore the NCDNHC is eager to collaborate with the Names
>
><<<friendlier wording, since it states a willingness to share work, rather 
>than demanding that others do work for us. /d>>
>
>
>>Council, the ASO, the PSO, the ICANN Board,
>>and Education and Research Networks
>>throughout the world to promptly assess the
>>threats to the security of the resources under
>>ICANN's coordination, and to establish measures
>>to address these threats, their avoidance, and
>>the minimization or avoidance of the collateral
>>damage they may produce, in order that non-
>>commercial organizations with limited technical,
>>human and financial resources can be protected
>>from such threats, and have affordable access
>>to preventive measures.
>
>         may produce, in order that organizations can be protected from
>
><<the existing wording suggests that we care only about "non-commercial 
>organizations with limited...resources."  We care about all 
>organizations.  In addition, all organizations have limited resources.  /d>>
>
>
>>Further, the NCDNHC calls upon its technically
>>strong members and their peers to aid ICANN
>
><<"and their peers"?  Please explain who might qualify as a "peer" to an 
>NCDNHC technically strong member.  /d>>
>
>
>>in the aforementioned effort to assess the
>>threats to the stability security of the DNS and
>>address allocation system and to provide the
>>community with their expertise. The NCDNHC
>>organization representatives will call on people
>>from their communities to provide further
>>assistance.
>>
>>The NCDNHC offers the technical and policy
>>expertise of its members, the high standing
>>of some of them in their societies, and the
>
>replace
>
>         "the high standing of some of them in their societies"
>
>with
>
>         of its members, their high standing in their societies,
>
><<simpler and more inclusive.  /d>>
>
>
>>intercultural experience of the constituency
>>to the process of assessing and securing the
>>security of the resources under ICANN's
>>administration.


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