[NCUC-EC] The flyer

Tue Jan 5 15:59:18 CET 2016

Dear All,

I made few edits to the brochure (spaces, alignments, hyphenation, color – some sentences where grey rather than black)
Please find attached.

Many thanks,
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Maryam Bakoshi
Secretariat Support - NCSG, NCUC, NPOC
Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN)

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From: NCUC-EC <ncuc-ec-bounces at lists.ncuc.org<mailto:ncuc-ec-bounces at lists.ncuc.org>> on behalf of "Mueller, Milton L" <milton at gatech.edu<mailto:milton at gatech.edu>>
Date: Tuesday, 5 January 2016 at 13:53
To: Rafik Dammak <rafik.dammak at gmail.com<mailto:rafik.dammak at gmail.com>>
Cc: "ncuc-ec at lists.ncuc.org<mailto:ncuc-ec at lists.ncuc.org>" <ncuc-ec at lists.ncuc.org<mailto:ncuc-ec at lists.ncuc.org>>
Subject: Re: [NCUC-EC] The flyer

I vote for using the existing one! It documents a dramatic moment in Rafik’s leadership ;-)

From: NCUC-EC [mailto:ncuc-ec-bounces at lists.ncuc.org] On Behalf Of Rafik Dammak
Sent: Tuesday, January 5, 2016 8:45 AM
To: João Carlos Rebello Caribé <caribe at entropia.blog.br<mailto:caribe at entropia.blog.br>>
Cc: ncuc-ec at lists.ncuc.org<mailto:ncuc-ec at lists.ncuc.org>
Subject: Re: [NCUC-EC] The flyer

Hi,

better to have a deadline first for receiving any additional comment or edits, for example this friday. then clean-up the draft and do a proofreading.
for photo, it depends if we have new ones. Peter took some previously. we can select from them. we also have some photos in ncuc website

best,

Rafik

2016-01-05 22:40 GMT+09:00 João Carlos Rebello Caribé <caribe at entropia.blog.br<mailto:caribe at entropia.blog.br>>:
Folks,

I can help even on the layout of flyer and Portuguese translation.

Everyone agree with Peter's review over Farzaneh edition?

The picture would be that or we should replace ?

That's all.

Joao Carlos

Em 05/01/2016, às 11:12, PeterGreen escreveu:

Dear Farz,

Thanks for your good work.
Based on the lated revised version, I have revised on my part.
Please see some minor edits in the document.
If any problem, please let me know.
Thanks very much.

Best
Peter
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From: milton at gatech.edu<mailto:milton at gatech.edu>
To: farzaneh.badii at gmail.com<mailto:farzaneh.badii at gmail.com>
Date: Mon, 4 Jan 2016 03:28:53 +0000
Subject: Re: [NCUC-EC] The flyer
CC: ncuc-ec at lists.ncuc.org<mailto:ncuc-ec at lists.ncuc.org>
Looks good! There are a few typos here and there, mostly minor, like two spaces where there should be one

From: NCUC-EC [mailto:ncuc-ec-bounces at lists.ncuc.org<mailto:ncuc-ec-bounces at lists.ncuc.org>] On Behalf Of farzaneh badii
Sent: Sunday, January 3, 2016 6:31 PM
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Subject: Re: [NCUC-EC] The flyer

Hi
I made the changes as you suggested. I think now it makes more sense and I also got rid of the description of domain name system. I primarily intended to mention domain name system because I have seen many fellows think that ICANN gets involved with the governance of the Internet as a whole, for example providing infrastructure etc. I just wanted to clarify that it is limited. But I think with your explanation it is better now.

I also made a change under the join us here "protecting noncommercial communications, activities and interests on the Internet." As our activities  are within ICANN mission I added within ICANN so that people don't think we are doing this outside of ICANN for the whole Internet.

I also added this paragraph "By joining us you can have a real effect on making ICANN a more transparent and accountable corporation. Together we can represent the non-commercial users interests more strongly."
Let me know what you think
I also updated the numbers.
I edited added "help" based on Bill's comment.

Comments are appreciated.

Best

Farzaneh

On 30 Dec 2015 04:30, "Mueller, Milton L" <milton at gatech.edu<mailto:milton at gatech.edu>> wrote:

I have some problems with the ICANN part.

>The second level domain names consist of one top level domain name
> and a name which the user chooses for example: name.NET<http://name.NET>

This is technically incorrect. A second-level name is a second-level name. This is referring to a full domain name (SLD.TLD). Moreover, I question the value of trying to explain the DNS in a brochure. If someone really doesn’t understand what a domain name is no brochure is going to fix it and they are unlikely to be getting involved in ICANN.

>ICANN develops policies in order to administer the domain names as well as
> other technical aspects, and makes decisions regarding its mandate through
> a bottom up process that allows all the relevant stakeholder groups participate
> in policymaking.

This description is part of ICANN’s continuing pretense that it only does technical stuff.  It should read:

“ICANN develops policies related to how many top level domains there will be, which ones will exist, to whom they will be assigned, and the regulations that apply to the entities that run them. Its policies are developed through a multistakeholder process.”

>ICANN currently performs its mission  under a U.S. Government contract
> and is accountable to the global community under an Affirmation of Commitments.

This could be changing very soon. Do we want to put this obsolete info into a printed brochure?

> ICANN is currently engaged in a process of internationalization, with
> new hub offices and engagement centers opening around the world.

This is junk, staff propaganda. We might say that “ICANN is currently engaged in a process of globalization, ending unilateral U.S. government oversight. ICANN has offices and engagement centers in different parts of the world.”

> Information on ICANN’s organization, governance, procedures, and
> range of activities is all available at

On the brochure there is no URL following this, only an ICANN logo. At any rate, we should point people to our own web site not ICANN’s, for further information.

From: NCUC-EC [mailto:ncuc-ec-bounces at lists.ncuc.org<mailto:ncuc-ec-bounces at lists.ncuc.org>] On Behalf Of farzaneh badii
Sent: Monday, December 28, 2015 9:37 AM
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Subject: [NCUC-EC] The flyer

Hi all

I have made changes to the ICANN part of the flyer. I think the flyer is for newcomers and it should be more simple. please let me know if you agree with this approach and feel free to make suggestion. we also need a more recent picture.

Best

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Farzaneh

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